Drabble: Steps (Harry/Daphne)

[lightofdaye]

Title: Steps
Rating: G
Characters & Pairing:Harry/Daphne
Word Count: 1 x 100
Content: nada
Disclaimer: The characters, settings and HP Franchise as a whole are owned by JKR and not by me. I make no profit from writing this piece of fanfiction.
Summary:Harry asks Daphne out.
A/n: Written for harry100 's prompt # 354 "One Step Forward". Enjoy!


Harry felt himself go red as she considered what he said. This was stupid, feeling just like a teenager asking Cho Chang to the Yule Ball all over again, though he had known Cho might like him before he asked.

Daphne Greengrass was a complete enigma to him.

“All right,” she said “Tomorrow evening then. You get one shot, Potter.”

Harry heaved a sigh of relief and saw amusement in Daphne’s eyes. She turned away.

“Ah, Potter there you are.” Robards said gruffly, carrying an overflowing armful of case files. “These are for you.”

One step forward, two steps back

Comments

[birdsofshore]

Ooh, I did enjoy this! I told you I'd like to be better at writing drabbles, and I feel like I can learn plenty from this one, firstly, the way you started in the middle of the action. It was very effective and set the scene perfectly.

I love Daphne's characterisation and the way you raise the tension before she speaks. Harry is adorable, being so open about his embarrassment and then relief. And then the contrast of the budding romance and Robards dumping a load of work in Harry's arms :DD Love it! The final phrase made me grin and the whole thing seemed so perfectly Harry, it was great. I hope he makes the most of his shot with Daphne - seems like they could be a good match!

[lightofdaye]

Thank you so much. This is a super lovely review for so little a fic.

The way I treat drabbles, especially one that are going to be 100 words exactly rather than a series of 100 word chunk is that they're like a joke. The final line here, I thought of first was the punch line, based off the prompt. Everything else is lead up to that moment.

[birdsofshore]

Well, I think it was a testament to the drabble that I got so much from it!

These are the type I would like to be able to write. The pure, stand alone type. The tip about thinking of the last line first is great advice and helps me understand more about why I find it so difficult. I seldom even know how a story is going to end until I get there, I'm just not very good at thinking it through in my head without actually writing it out. And of course, you're right, a drabble is like a joke! The end should hit you with a surprise or a... a moment of something. That's a really good description.